Illustrative deliverable · not a real client audit

What a First Screen Fix looks like.

This fictional example shows the format of the $29 work-first service. A real fix starts with the buyer's public homepage and desired visitor action; it is not generated from this mock brief.

Mock brief

Mobile bike repair in Portland

Assume the business offers on-site bike repair, and the visitor should check appointment availability. Its hypothetical first screen reads “Keep rolling” with a “Learn more” button. These details are invented solely for this example.

01 · One prioritized diagnosis

A new visitor cannot tell what happens next.

“Keep rolling” does not name the repair service or service area, and “Learn more” does not say whether the next page lists services, prices, or booking times. The first fix is to name the service and make the button match the actual appointment step.

02 · Paste-ready first-screen draft

Mobile bike repair at your Portland home or office.

Tell us what needs attention and where your bike is. Check available appointment times before you request a visit.

Primary CTA: Check repair availability

03 · Claim and click-path checks

Verify before publishing.

Confirm the business really serves Portland homes and offices.
Confirm the CTA opens a live availability or booking step. If it only opens a contact form, change the CTA to match that step.
Confirm the team can receive the bike problem and location before a visit.

This is a qualitative clarity recommendation, not a measured conversion improvement or guarantee.

Want a fix for your actual homepage?

Send the public URL and the one action you want visitors to take. Within 24 hours I will deliver one prioritized diagnosis plus a paste-ready headline, supporting line, and CTA. If useful, pay $29 after delivery; if not, you owe nothing.

Request a First Screen Fix

Want less commitment first? Ask for one free homepage finding. No purchase obligation.

No mail app? Email ppjdmpk@gmail.com with “First Screen Fix” in the subject, your homepage URL, and your desired visitor action.